Haiku taken down for revision and possible future publication. I’ll put up another post at the weekend.
These are wonderful, and in the classical tradition of haiku recounting a journey.
Many thanks MLA. These are the ‘informal’ ones from the trip; there is also a full renga sequence for the project, and that will be published in a few weeks.
A couple of nits:
1) The last line is unnecessary in
with lines of pollen –
the tree’s surplus
2) I like the potential in
going for a walk and
taking a dog for a walk
are not the same
but it is too much of an abstract contention as it stands.
Thanks Duncan. I agree about the pollen – my first version just had the two lines. And I’m not sure how to fix the dog walking one, but I’ll give it a try.
Only managed a quick read of it when it was up but very much enjoyed it!
Thanks Marion. What to post tomorrow?
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