North Uist trip haiku

Haiku taken down for revision and possible future publication. I’ll put up another post at the weekend.

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Poet, publisher, gardener
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6 Responses to North Uist trip haiku

  1. MLA says:

    These are wonderful, and in the classical tradition of haiku recounting a journey.

  2. sunnydunny says:

    Many thanks MLA. These are the ‘informal’ ones from the trip; there is also a full renga sequence for the project, and that will be published in a few weeks.

  3. Duncan says:

    Bravo!

    A couple of nits:

    1) The last line is unnecessary in

    puddles edged
    with lines of pollen –
    the tree’s surplus

    2) I like the potential in

    going for a walk and
    taking a dog for a walk
    are not the same

    but it is too much of an abstract contention as it stands.

  4. sunnydunny says:

    Thanks Duncan. I agree about the pollen – my first version just had the two lines. And I’m not sure how to fix the dog walking one, but I’ll give it a try.

  5. Marion says:

    Only managed a quick read of it when it was up but very much enjoyed it!

  6. sunnydunny says:

    Thanks Marion. What to post tomorrow?

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