The Monday poem

Balloon Picture





Responding to TFE’s Monday poem suggestion, that we respond to one of his photos, here’s my effort:


all that helium trapped in plastic skins
and just as well
an escape would have Toothy Pup
bark in squeaks
as if Spike and Jerry
exchanged voices

odd, the way we take
the ash of suns
to fill balloons with fun

or superchill
freezing magnets
so the fizzing hearts
of atoms pinball
to near c
and smash
a black hole
in the fabric of


[Incidentally, I read this last night as one of the ‘Three-Minute Spot’ poems at Rob’s Poetry at the GRV gig. 24 hours from writing to first reading.]


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14 Responses to The Monday poem

  1. Rachel Fox says:

    Oo, oo ‘the ash of suns’…yes please.

  2. Titus says:

    I’m with Rachel, love that central transition stanza.

    Whole poem has the “unexpected” quality, really like the leap from the picture. Thanks.

  3. anna says:

    A great turned around time Colin. Like Rachel I realy like the ash line.

  4. Fantastic that this poem has been performed already and a great poem it is too.Three sherries is definitely a good catalyst! My favourite bit was the ending

    so the fizzing hearts
    of atoms pinball
    to near c
    and smash
    a black hole
    in the fabric of


    Lovely imagery and imagination , love the idea of atoms pinballing. Well done Sunny and Tanx ye!

  5. sunnydunny says:

    Many thanks for the inspiration, TFE.

  6. Dominic says:

    Like this reflection on the trivial uses we find for the amazing.

    Reminds me, I heard someone on the radio yesterday saying that we have mobile phones with advanced features, satellites, etc, so that teenagers can send each other videos of mints fizzing up when they’re dropped into coke. We’re a weird species.

  7. Poetikat says:

    Very nice!

    “odd, the way we take
    the ash of suns
    to fill balloons with fun”

    Such a keen observation. I really enjoyed this.

  8. swiss says:

    we’ve both gone periodic table on this! lol

    not enough chemical/elemental poetry about imho!

  9. Jeanne says:

    Any time someone blends science and math with poetry, they get my attention. I thoroughly enjoyed your rendition of the balloon peddler.

  10. Ooo ashes of the sun. Nice

  11. Argent says:

    I’m with the “ash of suns” mob – a delightfully different take on the balloons pic. And we DO need more periodic table poetry.

  12. karen says:

    I really like the stanza about the using the “ash of suns/to fill balloons for fun” and the entire last stanza. Really nice.

  13. sorlil says:

    Very much like – ‘the ash of suns’, very nice.

  14. sunnydunny says:

    Wow! So many nice responses. I’m delighted, and I’m grateful to everyone who posted a comment.

    I’m preparing a posting of ‘elements’ poems for the one after next.

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